Blue Fairy

Yeah i agree with layleun. It's to hard to read and it has loadddds of chatspeak. I looks all jumbled. If it was written normally i would crit it.

lol i really liked this poem. It's funny and cute and I think it was really good. good poem :D I'm hopeless at them ~Blue Fairy

I really like this :D

I agree with Vivela. If you start something in a really negative way saying you don't really care that much then people aren't going to want to read it.

Hahaha this was quite funny. Your mind difinitely works in a strange way. Milkmen rock!!! :D Hope you get bored again soon

I agree with Mike. This doesn't sound like a conversation between Harry and Ron. There is quite a lot of conversations they have in class in the books. Find one ...

shouldn't it still be in fan fic anyway?

Some of the rhythm was a bit off in some places but other then that the poem is ok. :)

I can't see you work. Try posting it again :)

ahhhh! one big towering block of text. try putting it into paragraphs you will get a lot more reviews :D

whoah this poem is soooooooo good jabb :D I love it!!

hahahaha!! that is an amazing poem :D

my cat has already been spayed.

i agree with BBB *Eyes fizzle with length. I would crit it but it would take so long :?

thank you. you've helped loads. If any has anything else I could improve on let me know :D ~Fairy